Delete lines 8-9-10. They are redundant.

I don't think the reference to 9/11 is appropriate for this document.

The header for Chapter 3.2 is in bold font on every page and does not match the font used for other chapters in NBIMS.

"Information Delivery Model" is not what IDM represents.  This should read "Information Delivery Manual".

Insert the word "is" between the words "this" and "where".

Shouldn't the heading "Items needing Standardization" be italicized, as are Next Steps above and References and Links below?

"was the basis for the NIST study" should include a footnote for this study.

Carl Matthews, AIA, Page Southerland Page, Houston, TX

"It is hoped that they..."
Hopes, dreams and desires should not be part of the Standard. Suggest rewording the sentence.

Perhaps "It is suggested that they..."

Carl Matthews, AIA, Page Southerland Page, Houston, TX

suggest removing the words "and likely never will be."

Carl Matthews, AIA, Page Southerland Page, Houston, TX

suggest removing the words "Hence" and "even more" so that it reads "It is important that we..."

Carl Matthews, AIA, Page Southerland Page, Houston, TX

"The two primary ontololgies will be relationships and classes." This should be described further before moving on or cite where it is described further.

Carl Matthews, AIA, Page Southerland Page, Houston, TX

Figure 3.2-1 shows 4 Tiers which are described on p52-56. The names for the Tiers in the Figure should match the names in the text.

Carl Matthews, AIA, Page Southerland Page, Houston, TX

suggest changing "It will be important" to "It is important"

Carl Matthews, AIA, Page Southerland Page, Houston, TX

 It's not necessary or useful to note that some people will not have heard of these standards. Obviously some people will not have but it doesn't add anything to the discussion.